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Kushina
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 Posted: Tue Apr 28, 2009 10:38 pm Post subject: Jorrit zanpakuto |
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Name: Jorrit
Appearance:
Black hair, she likes to wear boots usually. She has Grey eyes and hates makeup. She likes to wear dresses and likes to wear bows also. She also likes belts.
Personality: She has a natural wanting for fighting. She also is nice if you get over the fighting part. She loves to see peoples art and also loves to send people to soul society when she can. She is always disappointed when she has to send people to hell, but it does happen sometimes. She also loves being nice to others sometimes.
Sealed State
Design:
About 3 feet long to start out. For every 50 spirit energy you have (maximum s.e.)it gains a centimeter of length.
Shikai State
Name: Kamoshirenai Sono Seisui Gyou Temae Jorrit (May purity seek you)
Design: Turns bright white color and it starts to have a long indent on both sides down the center. Length stays the same and the sword turns Wider and thicker by about a couple of inches.
Skill Requirements:
- Unarmed: 0
- Melee Weapons: 0
- Ranged Weapons: 0
- Spirit Techniques: 0
- Movement Techniques: 0
Damage Potential:1.1x
Activation Effect:
Name:Sacchi
Soul Class:Shinigami
Skill Requirements:Shikia state of zanpakuto
- Unarmed:0
- Melee Weapons:0
- Ranged Weapons:0
- Spirit Techniques:5
- Movement Techniques:0
Other Requirements:None
Type:Energy
Description:Makes user immune to fear
Effects:Gives the user a sense of immunity
Force:0
Cost:0
Powers:
Name:Boruto
Soul Class:Shinigami
Skill Requirements:Shikia state of zanpakuto
- Unarmed:0
- Melee Weapons:2
- Ranged Weapons:2
- Spirit Techniques:5
- Movement Techniques:0
Other Requirements:None
Type:Energy
Description:Gathers spirit energy from the user.
Effects:Shoots a bolt of light at the target
Force:1.6
Cost:75 spirit energy
Bankai State
Name: Kamoshirenai Sono Ankoku Gyou Temae Mata Jorrit (May darkness seek you also)
Design: This time it turns into a blinding white pure light and it turns much fatter and even a bit longer. It has weird ancient markings on the side of it and it also says healing on one side and pain on the other.
Skill Requirements: 0
- Unarmed: 0
- Melee Weapons: 0
- Ranged Weapons: 0
- Spirit Techniques: 0
- Movement Techniques: 0
Damage Potential: 1.3x
Activation Effect:
Name:Men'eki
Soul Class:Shinigami
Skill Requirements:Bankai state of zanpakuto
- Unarmed:0
- Melee Weapons:0
- Ranged Weapons:3
- Spirit Techniques:8
- Movement Techniques:0
Other Requirements:None
Type:Energy
Description:Gives the user emotional and mental immunity
Effects:Makes the user immune to any emotion given by an enemy
Force:0
Cost:0
Powers:
Name:Sumiyaka
Soul Class:Shinigami
Skill Requirements:Bankai state of zanpakuto
- Unarmed:1
- Melee Weapons:1
- Ranged Weapons:0
- Spirit Techniques:3
- Movement Techniques:7
Other Requirements:None
Type:Mix
Description:Doubles your speed for 2 posts
Effects:Turns spirit energy into physical abilaties for 2 posts
Force:0
Cost:1/10 of your max spirit energy and removes any future regeneration of spirit energy unless special ability changes this.
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Sench
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| Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 7:19 pm Post subject: |
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1. Add your zanpakuto's name to the title or put it in place of just "zanpakuto"
2. | Quote: | | Design: The design of your sealed zanpakuto. Usually it's a simple Japanese sword, though its size and craft may vary |
What you have is very far from what a sealed zanpakuto can be
3. | Quote: | | Name: The phrase which you would usually say to use the first release of your zanpakuto. It consists of some kind of command and your avatar's name |
Yours is completely wrong. Same for Bankai
4. | Quote: | | Damage Potential:0 |
It means your normal attacks with it will deal the same damage as your unarmed attacks
5. | Quote: | | Activation Effect: 0 |
"0" isn't a valid input for this field
6.
Are you sure?
7. A picture is NOT sufficient description (thought you'd know that from your character profile), especially since it gives 0 approximation of the weapon's size, only proportions |
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Kushina
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| Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 8:27 pm Post subject: |
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| ok, updated and what powers are there? Just one we make up? |
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Sench
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| Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 8:42 pm Post subject: |
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1. You're going to have a tower of a sword before you reach captain level like that. And sealed state doesn't really change
2. "Kinnet" isn't a command
3. Be more precise than a "couple of inches". Also, by "fatter", you mean wider or thicker?
4. With that damage potential, even shikai would require at least 25 points in melee weapons. Bankai, about twice as much
5. Those activation effects make no sense whatsoever. Read the template again
And yes, the powers of a zanpakuto are what your zanpakuto can do besides being a weapon. They are unique to it. Like Ichigo's Zangetsu's Getsuga Tensho, or Rukia's Sode no Shirayuki's White Moon. God, did you even read/watch Bleach -_- |
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Kushina
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| Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 8:55 am Post subject: |
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| Oh, ok, thx for explaining=D lol and for your knowledge sench, I am only on book 5 and that question took me forever to find in the library=) lol |
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Sench
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| Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 9:30 am Post subject: |
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| I will only say this one more time: READ THE TEMPLATE |
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Kushina
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| Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 6:43 pm Post subject: |
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k, sench, I re-read the template several times and found some mistakes but I have a couple of questions: | sench wrote: | | Name: The phrase which you would usually say to use the first release of your zanpakuto. It consists of some kind of command and your avatar's name |
Is this saying that I can have my own command right??
And: | sench wrote: | | Any passive bonus or continuous power you can use in Shikai. Use power or feat template for this |
So did I do anything wrong? I combed through the template but I may have missed something. |
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Hideki Takahashi
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| Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 6:55 pm Post subject: |
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| Kushina wrote: | k, sench, I re-read the template several times and found some mistakes but I have a couple of questions: | sench wrote: | | Name: The phrase which you would usually say to use the first release of your zanpakuto. It consists of some kind of command and your avatar's name |
Is this saying that I can have my own command right? |
I needs to be a real word maybe in japanese? I mean you can't just make it up |
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Amegaki
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| Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 6:56 pm Post subject: |
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By any passive traits, it means anything special that happens without any needed trying.
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Kushina
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| Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 7:05 pm Post subject: |
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They are http://www.freedict.com/onldict/jap.html look them all up and for the passive powers I looked up what sench gave me and you have to try so they would be like those=D I think.
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