Kyandoru Hicchuu

Kushina · Trainee Joined: 28 Apr 2009 Posts: 143 Location: U.S.

Name: Kyandoru Hicchuu
Age: 17 real age is approximately 76
Gender: Female
Height: 5'6"
Weight: 145

Soul Class: Shinigami
Occupation:Division 7

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Appearance: She wears her black coat open usually but on occasion will shut it for no reason. She also likes the white undershirsts to wear under her coat. She likes to wear boots sometime because of the extra traction. But when she is hunting someone down she likes to wear regular shoes if she can. She hates perfume(she's allergic) and she absolutely adores on make-up(but doesn't over do it). She also never wears blue because she hates the color blue.

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Hair:

Skin Color:

Body:

Personality: She is a nice person who likes to go on long trips away from home. On occasion she gets homesick but usualy she likes to be away from home. She hates the evil souls and despises all greedines in the world. She also loves to get around in outfits in her human body but she hardly does this unless neccesary. Her most favorite thing to do is to go fishing. She absolutely loves to go out on training expeditions to because she can always feel her power increasing and her vow getting closer to completion. Her favorite thing to talk about is what is beyond all the "known lands". She also loves technical talk about hollows powers and what strageties you would like to use against certain hollows. She knows that when it comes down to it you would never really completely follow strageties but she likes to debate about it either way. She also has a lot of integrity and honesty.
Inner World:

Spoiler:

In her"Inner World" she has to search through streets like in the picture except the buildings are all closed down. It is a little bit more dark and the buildings are all the same blackish color. The whole thing has kind of a dark aura around it and when she goes there she doesn't always know where she is going because she hasn't had enough experience in her inner world. It also plays tricks on some people by placing illusions of where you are but the illusions never side with anyone if there is a fight going on.

Stats:

Spirit Energy: 50
Strength: 10
Endurance: 10
Spirit Power: 10
Spirit Pressure: 10
Speed:10

Skills:

Unarmed: 0
Melee Weapons: 0
Ranged Weapons: 0
Spirit Techniques: 0
Movement Techniques: 0

Powers:None Yet

Feats: None yet

Weapon: Zanpakuto
Other Equipment: None Yet

Background: Kyandoru Hicchuu was a just a plus until she got bored one day and decided to do something fun. But when she came up to the place she was going to play, she saw a hollow eating somebody's soul and Kyandoru Hicchuu ran away crying. She came back the next day to swear that she would rid the world of as many of these hollow things as she possibly could. So she grew up (gained guts) and she had an oppurtunity to try to train to become a Shinigami. She immediately accepted the post because of her grudge against all hollows and she vowed she would never let one in her possible range take more souls if sshe could help it. Also, one day before she became a shinigami, she had almost died because there was the same hollow who had killed the person she saw and she ran away crying because she knew of the gap between them. Since then, she has vowed to close the gap between them and she also vowed to one day kill the hollow who has haunted her for so long.

Sench · Lava is a dickhead Joined: 22 Feb 2009 Posts: 243

Doesn't anyone read the template or library?
1. Put down her real age as well
2. Put down division number
3. More written description
4. Put N/A under "Mask Design" or remove the field at all
5. More personality
6. I love a picture from SimCity 4 as much as the next guy, but not only do you need written description, that picture doesn't tell us anything at all
7. Why is your Speed much higher than your Spirit Energy?
8. Remove Shunpo from your powers
9. Learn to use the "list" BB-code

Kushina · Trainee Joined: 28 Apr 2009 Posts: 143 Location: U.S.

ok, sorry about the speed. lol. Other than that I pretty much fixed it. What part do you want me to type list into anyways?

Sench · Lava is a dickhead Joined: 22 Feb 2009 Posts: 243

As given in the template code, the powers and feats are supposed to be a list. What do you think the bullets are for? To put down the techniques at them. Seriously -_-
And you still need more written description for appearance, personality and inner world. Plus her real age
And your background doesn't make much sense. What do you mean "normal shinigami" who runs away crying from a hollow? And how could she train to become a shinigami when she already was one? If you meant non-shinigami dead soul, it's called Plus. Or just soul

Kushina · Trainee Joined: 28 Apr 2009 Posts: 143 Location: U.S.

all right, updated again Very Happy

Sench · Lava is a dickhead Joined: 22 Feb 2009 Posts: 243

Looks good now
1. Please bring the text describing your inner world to the next line from the image
2. Please use the "spoiler" BB-code for your images, since they are so large
3. Removing the bullets from the Powers and Feats section wasn't necessary -_- Also, I just realized what you mean by "none completed yet". Feats are special abilities
4. You need to make your zanpakuto and put down the link to it now. You can post an empty template and just link to it so I can accept your profile for now, but you won't be able to use it until the zanpakuto itself is approved

Kushina · Trainee Joined: 28 Apr 2009 Posts: 143 Location: U.S.

ok, all done sench=D

Sench · Lava is a dickhead Joined: 22 Feb 2009 Posts: 243

Approved